Cheking The Grammar Of My Abstract About Change Management?
Q: Is there anyone who would like to help me with my abstract? Is the grammar
correct and expressions ok?
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ABSTRACT
This research is about changing computer [H1] software in organization, and
change of a word processing program in City Office of xx.
The theory deals with change management, key factors for problems and
success in change, and organizing a change process. As skills and competence
has become a core value in organization's processes, there is enlarged [H2]
part about learning and knowledge building.
Change management is said [H3] to be 1/3 of management and 2/3 of
leadership. A leader or a leading team has to guarantee availability of
adequate resources and knowledge. A leader has to guide the change process
to ensure personnel's commitment and keep the change in progress up to the
implementation of the change initiative.
The case study explores a change of a word processing program in City Office
of Lahti. The points of interests were change management and leadership,
information[H4] , resources, motivation, learning and knowledge building,
support, and attitude towards the change. Material for this study was
gathered by making notes in contacts with employees, interviewing the City
Secretary, the IT-support assistant, and the Manager of the IT-services and
with a form study among [H5] employees of City Office.
According to the study the main reason for criticism was nonexistent
information about the change. People felt, that the schedule was too tight
and employees' personal needs for training should have been defined. On the
other hand, people were content with the courses and the support.
In similar change processes to come in city of Lahti, good information
should be provided in very early stage of a change. A training program
should be built according to employees' needs. With good leadership a change
process can be carried through systematically ensuring an implementation of
a change. Naming a person in charge and support in every office is
recommendable.
Key words: change management, leadership, change, learning, knowledge
building
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[H1] changing computer software OR changing software ?
[H2] enlarged OR ----- (better word ?) ?
[H3] .. management is said to be 1/3 of ..OR. management is regarded as 1/3
of management.
[H4]communication OR informing ?
[H5] among (any better word ?)
A:-The first part needs to be either "changing computer software in *an*
organization", or "changing computer software in organizations" -- the
choice depends on whether the research related